I think the repitition at the end of every stanza as well as the rhyme scheme was very effective. good imagery that is "twanged" with a sadness, amazing

Hey the poem was awesome, its real sad, i enjoyed the imagery and the ryme scenes god too
nuff luv x

Well done. Excellent flow, well pinned, well written. I liked the poem very much, it was filled with sadness.

I like this poem the emotion was strong throughout it, Making the reader, myself, feel what you wanted to potray in this, Well penned the repetition was great and the imagery was beautiful.~Mel

This poem reflects the pain of feeling disconnected that I am sure many of us can relate to. In the dark section it certainly hits its mark. The flow is flawless. The emotion seems genuine, as if the author is writing from experience. It would be a sad epitaph engraved on a soul of despair.

At first it caught me off guard.
Like the first two lines rhymed
So I was expecting the next to lines
To rhyme as well.
When it didn't...
I was like...what?
But then I read it again
And then it made sense.
All in all.
I'm loving it :]]

Like how you used what you used in your last poem were you repeated something in the last line of each stanza. I like how you interchanged the ending sentence like, "That I had" "That I will" "That I have" and it was well organized. All in all a excellent poem.
~5/5

Oh god, a very greatly written great poem,
very deep and perfectly written. you are such a great writer.
keep it up
a 5/5 from me cause you really deserve it.

Well its pretty good to be honest though
I would have rhymed runaway with different things like
end of the day
It will al be ok once I
stuff like that but i have a unique style i guess?

I really like this poem, its got a deeper meaning i believe. 5/5 Keep writing!

This was a much better poem than your last, and the ratings should be switched. This poem had a much better flow, and the lines were so much easier to read. Good job on this poem.

Beautifully written and running away from things is one of the easiest solutions in solving problems. However we all have to face it now and then. Good luck with that. Keep up the great work. :)
cheers, josh