by HopefulxRomantic Apr 23, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
I was hurt, I was crying, |
THis was a phenominal poem and it really spoke to me. I saw through the words and into the reasoning and it left my in awe. Keep writing Danny! |
In truth, the poem is similar in rhythm to the hymn, but the other lines are not identical sans the two I purposefully changed. "You Were There" was originally "Were You There", and small changes like that have been made to the original. |
by sibyllene
For a poem that only had 2 new lines per stanza, this was fairly engrossing... that must be saying something. It definitely put me in mind of a song format. The repetition could get old after awhile, but it also has a nice, ceremonial feel to is, as if reciting verses. Which is something I thought was cool., and unique! : ) Write on... |
How painful it is to be downtrodden. |