Woah. That was captivating! So full of sadness. Amazingly penned Vanessa.
5/5
I loved it- it made me cry.

Elaine xox

This poems really deep, the emotion was strong behind it and you portrayed what you had to say really well. Good job~mel

Again, not my thing but still well done. Your emotion very apparent in this one, although the word choice isn't as strong as the other one but even still a very well done poem. 5/5

The raw emotion delivered by this poem is very effective in relaying the frustration experienced by those who love alcoholics and addicts, yet find it difficult to communicate.

Great poem.
It flowed well and the emotion was deep.

'Your inner demons have took control
Deadening you cold dark soul'

Keep it up 5/5

[Sarah]

Wow, another great poem.
A bit sad, but good.
A few times you typed 'you' instead of 'your' but other than that, this was an almost perfect poem.

keep it up.
<3

oh, and i'm sorry if this is true.
it seems as if it is, by the emotions.

This was beautifully written.
The first few lines had me hooked, and from thereon it just got better.
The flow was flawless, the imagery wonderfully done.
There's a couple spelling errors that need fixing but other than that you did a wonderful job.

Great poem, full of anger that just jumps out at you when you read it. I love that. 5/5

The simple capitalization really impacts the poem. Normally, unnecessary capitalization annoys me, but it seems to fit in well with the poem's tone. Very nice-- again, great meaning.

My favorite of them all.. however.. i know its weird but i have the most critique's on this poem.. lol please dont take them offensivly becuase i really do love this poem :D

first i think that you could have used other words besides the "F" word to release your anger.. i know some people think it lets it out.. but as a writer you have the ability to express your anger in a more powerful and beautiful way (however its just an opinion)

also i dont understand why you say
"deadening you cold dark soul" ...
that implies that this person was cold and dark before the alcohol.. however the whole point of the poem implies you loved this person before the alcohol.. so im assuming that they didnt at that point they didnt have a cold and dark soul.. i'm not sure if its forced sylables or im just understanding wrong..

also i dont get why you wrote
"Drinking can not erase the past
All the faces and images that do not last"
maybe im not understanding this correctly either but its sounds like you are sayng the faces and images dont last.. but drinking cant erase them (even though that would mean that drinking cant erase what is already being erased) i dont know .. i have really bad reading comprehension so its probably me.. :P

other than that i really loved this poem.. how you are so caring in it.. also the flow was great too.. an enjoyable read =]

I don't like the ending; cliche. But, I really liked the first stanza. It was very good and captivating.
Hm. Nice flow as always.
So, all in all I liked it.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5