Somewhere In The Darkness

Try not to use the pronouns.
Example: I, he, it
It ruins the flow when you use it all the time.
All in all.
It's a good poem.
I'll give it a 4/5 :]

I don't know... i really liked what it's about, but the rhyming messed me up a little... and the flow seemd off also. but this is good... keep it up! 4/5

I thought it was a great message you put out there, the rhyme was slightly off in some areas, but I enjoyed it. A few minor changes is all that is needed, you'll improve the more you write, so keep writing. I agree with Arash, for a 14 year old, you are not bad at all. Keep up the good work, like i said, the more you write, the better you'll get, great work, kiddo. 4/5
-Ally

This one better than the other 2, still feel allittle forced rhyming, good emotions put out here.
at the bottom, it seems like you werent interested in writing anymore, that you just needed an ending. could use a little work. just a thought.

Ohkay two things

This was an exciting and unforgettable event"" this line throws off the poem a little bit i think if you change some words it will be perfect and

Thought I'm alone and without her I suffer,
"" i think you meant to put though instead of thought.

other wise this poem was wonderfully writen and i enjoyed reading it. the flow of it seemed to work with the poem and there was a bit of an image formed there to. good work.