by Melpomene
This poem was also a sweet love poem, i enjoyed this one alot. I think you did a great job portraying your feelings towards a girl in this poem. Well done~mel |
by Mommy And Me
Ohkay two things |
by AlaSkA
This one better than the other 2, still feel allittle forced rhyming, good emotions put out here. |
I thought it was a great message you put out there, the rhyme was slightly off in some areas, but I enjoyed it. A few minor changes is all that is needed, you'll improve the more you write, so keep writing. I agree with Arash, for a 14 year old, you are not bad at all. Keep up the good work, like i said, the more you write, the better you'll get, great work, kiddo. 4/5 |
by Sandra D
I don't know... i really liked what it's about, but the rhyming messed me up a little... and the flow seemd off also. but this is good... keep it up! 4/5 |
by Startle Me
Try not to use the pronouns. |