Hey,
I loved the title fo this poem. It really caught my attention and drew me into the poem. It was also kindof like an alliteration. I mean i wondered what you menat by this title. It really made me want to read the poem. The first stanza made me think. It created this image in my head of something just clashing togerther and sending of sparks. I quite enjoyed this. In the secound stanza youve got this feel of sleep and unconciousness. Then you also had this religious feel towards the end of the poem. very intresting read. Your vocbulary choice was excllent, you made me get out dictionary.com. Quite dark and i wonder what you were thinking of when writing this peace. Brilliant read. To improve i suggest you sue a more widening punctuation. But still a great read. keep writing! x

Whoa that was so good lol it was like beyond my vocabulary , deep, different, and just awesome . keep it up =)