I'm drunk again

by firexdancer   Apr 24, 2007


The room spins around me,
as i try to stand tall,
but i have no choice but to fall.
my voice my only comfort,
as i sing a little song,
yet it starts fading in the heat, and i know that something's wrong.
my sweat a part of breathing,
my gasps a part of light,
i know that it is daytime, yet i think that it is night.
i'm waiting in my utopia,
mind banishing my fears,
once again i'm drunk, and this time it's on tears.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    I don't like it. Your other poems are much better. That is just my opinion, but I think that these is 3/5. I don't like atmosphere and wording is poor. I am sure that you can write much better.

  • 17 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    This is quite different from your usual style but you pull it of. You reached out of comfortable ground in your layout of this. I liked it hun

    xxx alex xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    Another greatp oem :d

    xxx alex xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    Good poem. Very sad at the end.. Keep writting!! your very good at it!

  • 17 years ago

    by Hatori

    The end of this poem was quite a nice touch. At the beginning, people would say it was a funny poem, but the ending ties it off and makes you feel sad for the person in your poem. I look forward to reading some of your other poems, and congratulations on the 3rd place! Keep it up!

    With all due respect,
    Hatori

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