This works well until the flow at the end went a bt wonky lol, your poetry is lovely you should continue to write and i shall continue to read xxx alex xxx

Strong words. I agree with girlie goo, the flow was a little off at the end, but it gave the poem an edge. The last line is powerful and sad, and the mis-aligned flow almost punctuates that power. Nice work.

Take Care - Sole. x

Ive just read the coments ill read the poem in a sec or 2...

Ivereadeditandilikeditverimucht!!!keepon!