I have read a few of your poem and I really like this the best so far. The style is diffrent, but it was still easy for me to read. It kkept my intrest, nice flow. I am sorry you feel this much pain, from something that A MAN did to you in sin. Please don't let it end you like it does so many others. I am here if you want to talk.

This style was different but i really like it. This read was interesting and kept me facinated from start till end. Strong emotions flowed throughout this. Well done on a nicely written sad poem. It was perfectly penned and definitly deserves a 5/5 in my eyes. Good work~mel

Very nice poem. I think you could have extended your choice in vocabulary. I couldn't get into this poem that much, and it took me awhile to get what you were talking about. It was good, though. There's no doubt about that.

Alesia

Hmm...
This seems more like a story than a poem.
It has strong meaning to it, though.
You should space things out a bit more
It's a bit hard to read. :]

Again excelent work please keep it up i love reading your stuff and again thanks for shareing with us

This poem is good
usually long poems lose my attention
but this one didnt

This has such a strong message in it. It seems to be more of a story though. i still liked it...it was wonderful to read.

Great poem but I did notic a few thing.

1. The line between the 1st and 2nd stanza "They" should be "The"

2. The line between stanza 2 and 3 "They" should be "The"

3. Line 6 of the 3rd stanza "payed" I think should be "prayed"

other then that I thought that it was a great write:) 4/5