It seems a bit forced to me.
I liked that you were writing it
Like you were talking to someone.
But it really does seemed force.
But still.
I'll give you a 4/5

To much telling and not enough showing. You told a story so the reader didnt really know how it felt. Good plot and all but it could use a little revising. Great write! 4/5

Wow, I really think that this one is very true and it is a cryin shame that it is this way. A relationship whether you are the bf or gf, should not be your world. A man or woman should not "complete" you, they should compliment you. Like a pair of shoes and a purse or something, Im not a girl i dont know if that is the right analogy or not, but hopefully you get it. Great job, 5/5 -unattractive1

This is very true to life although some of it seemed a little forced. There was emtion in it, just not enough to get a clear picture in your head, or to feel what the writter is feeling. But I loved the fact that this is the way life is, and you told it straight up for that you get 4/5

Sky, I'm sry to have 2 say this in the touchy subject, and i've been ignoring this but now i can't stand it, she never ditched plans w/ u and she certianly does not think pop pop is gay, if u think its gay then why do still do it? sry but i can't ignore this any more, i'm sry i'm just tellig you the facts

Hey