Hey i reli like this poem well done. thanx 4 wat u wrote bout my poem. keep on writing, u r reli gd. xx

This poem was amazing, I loved the flow. It was terrific!! I was kinda wondering where it would go, if you could keep the flow and I didn't think you could because that's soo hard but you did! You surprised me!! Amazing!!
I especially loved:
"now she usually is quite happy
but it's just not quite enough
to satisfy her aching heart
this whole games a bluff"
It was a wonderful piece, keep it up!!
thanks for the comment;)

Alissa

I like this, i really like the ending and i also like the part where she is longing to feel unbroken, silently loving him and slowly dieing inside......
<3
L.C

For the most part I felt confused in this poem, at first I thought they were together the half way down the poem I couldnt tell you anything then at the end this was all a fantacy of hers. I just felt there was no structure at all to the peice nothing to make this flow within a single message, Nice try maybe next time Plot121

She wants him. Its clear of that much. Has she told him? Or is he just that clueless?
I liked it.

I love this poem, its the thoughts are well oragnised. I guess one of the reason why I love it so much, is that fact that it speaks to me. Hey your actually telling my story, am just getting over a situation like this. I love it, keep up the good work.

Hope

Wow thats really good i wish i could ryme better i just started but u r great at this

I think many people can see themselves as this "invisible" person. i know i have. it seems to me that in everyones life there's always going to be that one person that you just want but you know you could do better without because of all the pain they cause. nice poem.