Comments : Strong enough.

  • 17 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    Oh yeah say it loud and proud love this poem and its message its awsome 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

  • 17 years ago

    by Fighter (Ariane L.)

    "Are you now man enough for me?"

    "I'm finally strong enough to move on. "

    i loved these two verses!! very dark, yet well written poem. keep it up!
    -xox-

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    How powerful and strong was that!
    Excellent work m'dear, you could feel the emotion bursting from the words..
    Take care
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 17 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Wow i felt that when i was reading it, i love poems that capitivate me you have a gift

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Very moving. I loiked this one best of all. I caould feel the anger leaving a bitter taste in my mouth.Excellent. 5/5

  • This is a good poem.
    I think you could of done more on it though.
    Other than that, it was good. It flowed well and the emotion was shown.

    Keep it up 5/5

    [Sarah]

  • Wow i really like this poem......great poem..5/5..........check out some of my poems if u would thankz...

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Aww I like the ending! I enjoyed this poem! its like watching a movie! well done! keep writing!

  • 17 years ago

    by Sydney

    Powerful and strong. I could feel the anger in it which makes it even more amazing XD

  • 17 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Hey!!...Beautiful poem...great ending....strong message protrayed through this 1...very powerful write...kp it up!..
    xxPoojaxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    Now thats a poem, you can feel the hate illuminating from your words, very nice

  • 17 years ago

    by David

    Black eye broken arm..

    you need to put a , in this poem. black eye, broken arm..

    but still well done and very full of hurt and voilence. 5/5 David

  • Okay, this was by far my favorite of yours.

    It was just so powerful, the flow was great and it had me in tears.

    I can relate to this poem. I loved this line..

    "And the anger and the pain in my eyes?"

    So fierce! And I loved the title.. if this happened to you, I'm sorry.

    this was excellent..really I enjoyed this one. I've added it to my favorites.
    A definite 5/5
    ~Ally~

  • 17 years ago

    by skynerraw

    I enjoyed the poem, but I think it would be better if you put "you" instead of "u" and "And" instead of "n" I think it would look better, other than that I enjoyed reading it and full of emotion, I'm so sorry if this is about your life... loved the poem...

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Great job... the flow again was off in the start... but you picked it up again quickly.. i love the positive ending .. the poem was very vivid and filled with wonderful wording..

  • 17 years ago

    by Boy

    Do you enjoy watching me fall?
    And the anger and the pain in my eyes?
    i loved these lines. you have great talent. you should keep it up nice work 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Fluffy

    On the whole this piece is effective, although there are some grammatical errors:

    "I raise back up" - change that to 'rise'.
    "A hit on face" - change that to 'a hit on the face.
    "I collapse and feel the hits through my body"- this does not make much sense. I think you should change it to: "I collapse, feeling the bruises sinking in" or something like that.
    "Walk to mirror, the pain i feel," - that should be: "I walk to the mirror in pain".
    "hurt no more!" - and finally, that should be: "hurt anymore".

    Other than that, it was a well written piece. Well done.

  • 17 years ago

    by Dee

    This is very well written very touching, good work. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by cory

    That was incrediblely well written, i could feel the rage emanating from the verses.great job!!= ) another 5/5

    Cory

  • 17 years ago

    by Beyond Repair

    Wow, 20 comments, haha. Great piece, I don't know what else I can write that these people already haven't, except that I hope you never have to write something like this again. What doesn't kill us makes us stronger, unless we become paralyzed. haha. Keep up the good work. ~Zach