Your writing sounds a lot like mine when I first joined.
The one sad thing about this site is that people will vote and not explain themselves.

I think I'll add you to my favs and i will offer feedback for every poem you do.
Only if you want me to.

I enjoyed this poem even though I'm not a chritian myself. A lot of your stanzas were very creative and clever. I emplore you to keep writing.

Have a nice day.
- Emma

So powerful this piece, i enjoyed every bit of it! 5/5 for you please keep writing. welcome to Poems and Quotes btw :-)

Well i must admit i was not thinking like that when it comes to love, i think it is safe to say that you opened my eyes,
great job

Real sweet i love the way boy write lovepo ems is so sweet lol :D real good flow and the stanza were real good too

xxx alex xxx

I loved everything about this poem, the flow the rhyme, the message was clear and showed true emotions, and i related to everything u wrote about. great job, and im adding to to my favorites

Greg
This peice was long but I didn't mind reading it because of how powerful it was.It was full of emotions and the concept was great.
You did and excellent job on this peice.
Amazing job I loved it! 5/5

Elainex

Nice poem. I really liked it for reasons I don't really know:) 5/5

For some reason, I thought it was a poem about your love for God. I was mistaken.. haha. I like the message it brings, though. Dazzlingly astute, bittersweet write. Keep it up!

Ohhh wow...I frikken loved this!

''If hearts were made for each other
Why do some hearts blame the other''
I adore these two lines, to me they really stood out.

''Then when your heart is cracked in 2
And no one else believes in you''

Again..wow...those lines hit me so hard, I think they have great impact.

I liked the simile you used, it made me smile.

The flow was flawless throughout, the wording was a real pleasure to read, as was the whole poem, the imagery created vivid pictures for me and the rhyme scheme was enjoyable.

The only thing that I didn't like was how you wrote some words in numbers such as ''cracked in 2'' and ''8am'' instead of two and eight.
It is my opinion that writing in shorthand in poetry lessens the meaning of the poem.

Apart from that however, I LOVE this!
Outstanding work.

Your rythym is amazing oin this poem, and some of the ways you use rhyme is inspiring, it fits so perfectly.
i loved the message too, I am confused as to if you and the person split up becasue you trust in god or if you are still together because you trust in god? I guess thats what poetry is about never really knowing, always wondering. I would like to know though :-) ha.

I loved this, and bravo that you wrote from your heart and obviously gave this work alot of consideration for it to be this good.Also for me to be commenting on it at 11pm :-)

Well done honey, I love this x

Truly beautiful! I loved it! I really like how you fit God into it all. I don't see a lot of poems like that, and it was a joy to read. I really loved the fifth stanza in this poem. It was just so emotive! Amazingly well penned!

Loved it very much.

A long deep poem. very good, and definitely my favorite among yours. great job

your servant:
david

Im not too big of fan of religion poems. but, no downrate or anything. a bit lengthy, but a good write none the less.

This was interesting however I think that it should have gone under the religious poems, because I have a feeling that a lot of people who dont like this kind of poem will just downrate it and not bother to say why, and at least in that way they are prepared. I'm not really a big fan of religious stuff but this one was a bit different than what I was used to, and the comnbination of both the religous poem and the love poem was well put together. nice job.

I liked it alot
At first I was like 'WHOA! THATS LONG!'
but when you start reading it you can't stop
i think it shouldve gone under religious poems though.
Either way, great poem

That was very inspiring piece! but i guess u better put this in about life category.. coz base on my understanding it really tells somthing more about life! but though... u still expressed those deep words very well. keep it up and 5/5

Well, not many can pull of these long poems. You did a great job at explaining every feeling in this and it is very well written. The feeling in this was powerful and the flow was just about right. I can so relate to this. Great job! 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

Well, not many can pull of these long poems. You did a great job at explaining every feeling in this and it is very well written. The feeling in this was powerful and the flow was just about right. I can so relate to this. Great job! 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

One of the best poems i've read on this site. truly it's beautiful. 5/5 for me!!
:):)