The phone rangs? other than that little mistake this is very good.

I'm kinda confused on this poem, dont know why. I think you should use ring rather than rang, it'd sound much better.

How do i remove or change that

Thanks I have removed it

I hope for your sake that this wasn't written from experience. Powerful, but room for a little improvement. The structure was interesting =)

I really hope that this wasnt written out of experience. it is a sad poem. the structure was off a little but other then that it was a really good poem. 5/5

Kalee