As your tears fall slow

by firexdancer   Apr 25, 2007


What you might not understand,
is that not everyone is born in fairytale land.
on a cloud, or far away,
some were born just to stay.

they try to keep us as long as they can,
talking sweet, holding your hand.
but underneath their pretty smiles,
you'll see something, it isn't worth your while.

if i were you i'd run away,
desert your people, find someplace to stay.
one day you'll realize it saved your life,
not everyone is kind and nice.

but until that time you'll cry your way,
through the night and through the day.
no matter what happens you know you'll be sad,
all you understand is how to be mad.

mad at your parents, mad at yourself,
mad at how you left your heart on the shelf.
and as the forgotten days go by,
you'll start remembering what it's like to be alive.

so just as the water drips into the ocean,
a cup brimming with emotion.
as the abandoned roosters crow,
you'll smile so sad, as your tears fall slow.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    Honestly I don't like it, I won't rate it... I don't know, it isn't really deep and you could write it better.

  • 17 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    I like the way that this poem thros in realtiy and smacks it in your face lol. It was really good, again some strong words used here.

    xxx alex xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    You tackled reality here and it worked well :D
    xxx alex xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by honeypot

    So just as the water drips into the ocean,
    a cup brimming with emotion.
    as the abandoned roosters crow,
    you'll smile so sad, as your tears fall slow

    Hi Gabriella,

    Wow, this poem is beautiful. I especially like way the words flow in the lines above.

    there is no advice I can give you as your knowledge and depth supasses my own, just keep feeling and writing from the heart and your poetry will always be true. xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by David

    Awww. this was so perfect. you are improving with each poem. the ending i thought was great! yet the start of the last line in this poem did not make sense.

    you'll laugh for once, now wat are you trying to say here?

    5/5 anyway. David

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