by Gothic Girl in Pain Apr 26, 2007
category :
Dark, fantasy /
unexplained
I cannot help what I see. Especially if it is our destiny. But in what frame of mind, are we to understand. The task that is at hand. |
It's interesting, but I don't like this line: "The future is a scary thing. For a psychic, it is very scary." I think( but that is mine opinion only) that you shouldn't repeat words as you did with "scary". The rest of the poem sounds good. |
Wow that was great, your really improving, trully, your flow is much better, i felt more of you in it, and where your blunt is perfect and gives more meaning beautiful. 5/5 |