Good work ... the second stanza may need some work but over all i loved it...

>> keep it up ... i might read some more of ur poems..

Great job on the poem , I liked it , bur like anqelina said it needs some work but I really liked it ,
I can see the fear in your eyes
The smile you wear is but a disguise
All these depression you think
Despair, is what it brings
deep felt that so many times in my life, thank you and keep up the good work~~~~~~Tracy

Great work! It had a deep meaning and was really terrific! keep up the good work! :)

That's so sad. a Beautifully penned poem. All in all it was great. Thank's for sharing.
Happy writing.
Hannah-