She's Hurt

by lost dream   Apr 26, 2007


I can see her crying on the floor
I can see her hurting years before
I can tell she's burning up inside
Tired find me a place to hide

Sometimes she cries all alone
Having thoughts about things that happened years before
Scared that there would be more of all the hurt and pain door

She doesn't believe in real love
She just knows love isn't true
Everybody is going to hurt you and you're only Friend is tears
while your heart gets broken and you live in fear

Trying to find her light,
but they keep hunting her saying nothat's not right
She sits in the dark, all alone, wondering why she was born
And now she's hurting and writing some sad Poem

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  • 17 years ago

    by Shirani Graham

    ItS a finE piecE of worK, thaT thrilleD uS greatlY....

    luzaN anD nazeeR

  • I liked it i like all your poems good job keep it up~melissa~

  • 17 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    This line:

    "Tired find me a place to hide"

    Put a comma(,) in between tired and find.

    "Scared that there would be more of all the hurt and pain door"

    I think you should take off the word door, dont get why its there.

    "Trying to find her light,
    but they keep hunting her saying nothat's not right"

    I think you tried too hard to rhyme in these's two lines. They seemed forced. And put a space in between no and thats. Sorry if I sounded mean in my comments but I wasnt trying to be. I just give honest opinions. Keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Jennifer

    Great Job! I liked it...very original!