Im with I coz this pain on this one seemed sort of long altho i really did like it just maybe to rambeling .... still an exclent mesage

Beautiful...Great wrk....Kp up the good wrk..The style u've used is different.....Kp writing......u've portrayed a beautiful messg thru this 1..Good wrk!

I thought it was ver nicely worded, it was strong and powerful and it had a good message. 5/5

Like I've said with your other poems...
It's overwhelming.
You kept repeating "she", it was anoying.
I don't know if you want to hear it again.
But just erase a few words and this poem would be fantastic.
This story is powerful.
Although it kind of feels as though I've read it before.
I'm not saying that you copied this from someone.
Oh no my dear.
Don't get me wrong.
I'm saying it seems a bit... cliched.
I don't know, diseases always seem cliched to me.
I don't know why.
Other than that,
I guess it's okay.
4/5?