A few minor things you need to work on, and punctuation would really help your poetry. I liked this part the most.

"There is no semblance of sanity
No insinuation of light
No hope for the future"

No hope for the future, I don't know, it just stuck out... Keep up the good work, you had a very powerful, emotional message there, good work. 4/5
-Ally

Very great =) hey could i borrow ur poem? not as my own but ill just use it as my rpg character description :) hey read my poems too!! =) thx 5/5

This is a good written poem. I like the way you wrote a few of the lines. 4/5 Good job

Wow....very dark and well written....so descriptive..great write! 5/5!!