Girl, In Pieces

The beginning is very strong and the end is stronger... you lost me a little in the middle in these lines

"she wants to spread her wings
get away from this place
but she doesn't want to leave" i

its a little cliche

"she wants to be a scientist
she wants to be an artist"

this i just dont see as necessary to the poem...

however... all around it was still an enjoyable read i loved theselines "She's a paradox
a perfect balance between everything
and nothing"

and this one which is oh my gosh just the perfect ending "how are you supposed to understand,
when she can't? "

also i love the whole idea of this poem :D

Your poems get better as I go.. This one was the best so far. VERY powerful. Strong message. Makes you think. You're a pretty good writer, keep it up. I really liked this part.

"she wants to spread her wings
get away from this place"

and....

"she wants to be free
but she holds herself down
how does she make sense?"

It is so true.. Great work, keep it up. 5/5
-Ally