Saturday Night

It was a sad poem and you made sure that we could see that. Well done on a great piece of writing. 5/5
cheers, josh

This was a really good poem
The flow was awsome and the feeling was great
5/5 from me!

--Katie

"Passing right by one of your favorite place"
['places'] It's grammatically incorrect to write place, because you wrote the word 'one'.

"Asking me about you all my co-workers"
[I really didn't like the wording in this line]
Asking about you was all my co-workers
[try that line instead]

"They are too curious about and sinners"
[That line didn't even make sense]

Ok, so I didn't really like this poem, because I had to read some of the lines over and over again to make sense of it. It really disturbed the flow of the poem. This poem really deservers like a 3.8, but I will vote it a 5, because there is potential.

Great poem!, 5/5 for this one. hope everythings goin well, Keep writing :-)

Sitting for hours on chair of this boring pub = Sitting for hours on a chair in this boring pub

Another suggestion:

Did you know the pub and fun rhyme? I think the word "fun" can fit in there rather than club.

It's my the first saturday night without you =It's my first saturday night not being with you

Passing beside of your past favorite place = Passing right by one of your favorite places

Looking inside,hoping to see your face =Looking inside, hoping to see your face...'

But the salesman points me now to shoo= ummm, talk about random?! How many salesmen do you know shoo people away from the store they work for? Lol, what bad employees!

:O I didn't know about the syllabication, but I think you should make the footnote a header.

This poem, I suppose, will get a 5.0 from me although it is technically worth a 4.0 but I still did like it.

5/5
~Stephen White