That was good, don't get mad, but mush should be much, and the last two stanzas felt slightly forces, but they flowed well. I think you could of added more about your family to this, would have made more sense to me, but I'll give it a 5/5. nice job

-Liz-

Wow very sad poem. That is full of emotion. I really liked it because of those two reasons. Keep up the great work:)

5/5

Truly amazing as always. this poem is so dark, and so sad, that I almost started crying. The emtions are very strong.wellpenned, great flow, you did an excellent job. I love your work. Keep writting and I'll keep reading. 5/5

That is amazing! So emotional. Made me feel quite sad :( Well done! Xx Chrissie

Excellent poem. It was very sad and packed with emotions. I do think though that the last stanza and the penultimate stanza were a little forced sounding. It still flowed well though. Good job.

Truly wonderfully written. the pain put in this poem is shown...i hope everythings fine. 5/5

~Austin

Ohhh my...I LOVED this!
The flow was flawless, the imagery created vivid pictures for me, the wording was a treat and the emotion and depth screamed out beyond the words.
So very heartbreaking, yet so fantastically written.

Its more sad then dark.
whatever.
It was a well flowed poem and I enjoyed reading it.
Hope you keep writing and improving good lcuk!

Wow, the second poem that has made me want to cry in the space of five minutes!
You write so fluidly with so much emotion in the words..
It really gets to the readers heart..
5/5
*Gem*

I like this poem alot it is very deep... i fell your pain about your mum...
xoxooxoox
-kay-

Hmm, I liked it when I read it in my head but than when I read it out loud I got stuck at some parts. It was good, don't get me wrong; I did like it, but also the overall message..it was sad and powerful, but it sent out a bad vibe. I dunno, but it does happen everyday, this kind of thing, so yeahh. Good job Hun.

Bloody tear drops flow
Down my cracked cheeks
As I get ready to jump
After all these painful weeks
I found the third stanza weaker
Than any of your other stanzas
It seemed force and completely
Ruined the whole flow of your poetry.
I give you a 4/5 on this one :]