O mi gosh! O_O That was incredible! What a sad, sad tale, but what a beautiful way to put it! This is soo amazing, as sad as it is. Nice flow, I really loved this one!

Heartz!

Beautiful poem!.....great flow..it's filled with sadness..yet so beautiful

Oh wow, that was really good. I expecially loved the ending, dont know why. On this line take the 's' away from time:

"bones broken....from each times she has fallen"

Thats all I got. Great choice of words. Keep writing! 5/5

Oh wow, that is relee sad, i like how you formatted it, very nice. I liked these lines, so powerful:
screaming ceases....no one will hear her anyways
body trembles..... shes too tired to brake
LOVE ITT!!!
Carissa

Creative Format...Well-Worded...This Was Really Good Hun! 5.5
xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

I like this poem it's really good.