I wish it would have kept going because it was really going somewhere for me...and I think the only problem was a couple of lines the syllabols didnt sound to good but it only happened once in awhile
5/5 from me

Good Job.. i think this was an awsome poem.. Keep up the good work!.. 5/5

I enjoyed reading every bit of this poem. What I liked most was the set up, very nice. Some of the rhyming wasn't all that great, but it was still a great poem. Keep it up. 5/5

Alesia

This poem is very well structured, and the rhyming is really good,some perhaps a lil forced but yer good anyways xxx alex xxx

I like it.
Although...
It's not really all that consistent.
You're talking about one thing
Then you talk about something else.
Other than that.
It's good.
I like your format.
Everything just flowed off my tongue.
Well done.
5/5 :]

This poem wa sup and down and your rhythm wasn't very clear.
Just some thing you need to work on 3.5