Oh gee, so much description in this poem. it was so sad and destroying. well thats how i felt. yet in there was something that i cant explain. its apart of me. also the ending was wonderfully sad.

5/5 def! David

Wow deep poem 5/5 cynthia m. X)

Wow this was very sad.. I cant quit tell if she had a dream, or if it really happened but whatever happened I liked the poem.. the title fit perfectly. And even though I dont normally like that rhyme scheme that you used I think that you managed to make it work. well done.

I'm stunned.
That was flippin fantastic! Yet, it was terribly sad of course.... The imagery was so vivid & the emotions were strong & clear..... & you had a nice rhyme scheme & everything seemed to flow nicely. Well done! Keep writing! 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Aww this is so sad! the emotions was raw and powerful! well penned poem! flow was alright for me! well done! and thanks for the comment ;)5/5!

Wow, this was my fav so far. It made me want to read more. I think this was outstanding and the words 'bleeding mascara' say it all.

xxx alex xxx

Interesting rhyming... I like it, you told good story and expressed the pain and all emotions which this poem holds superbly. Imagery is also good, it deserves 5/5

And yes, I don't like title too much but great poem:]

Wow, dark, deep, depressing...well written!! i really liked it 5/5!!