Foul is Fair (Septuplet Tetractys)

I thought it was different

but i thought it was great
and i loved the flow of it

"Foul
Witches
Come to you
Tell prophecies
They can not kill, but they will deceive you"

this is my favorite part^^

it reminds me of the book

HARRY POTTER AND THE HALF BLOOD PRINCE

5/5

Outstanding!!
I loved the way you told the story in such a beautiful format.
You should be so proud of this piece.
Brava m'dear
5/5
*Gem*

(You're right about that last line in the little box, it feels off to me too, but i don't know why, lol =)

Well, I loved this the moment you sent it to me on MSN, so it is no different here..there is one line that kind of bugs me though,

"Went for a ride"

^^ Talking about Banquo, I don't know what about it bugs me, but something doesn't feel right. Anyways, overall, very good job Dear.

5.5

I love tetractys, i think u should give a description of what a tetractys is to those who read it and dont know what it is, u can go to http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html or u can use one of my descriptions, by the way the 13th line (is killed) i think is only 2 syllables but im not sure, if it is 2 syllables then u can change the line to (has been killed), this is a very good poem terra, i like the way u and jenna wrote these poems, i give it a 5/5!!!

Bryan,