Comments : Reversable Dreams.

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    That last verse was really creepy. I was lying on my bed.. in the dark, reading it to myself. *shivers* Really good job on this one!..
    Just one suggestion..

    I think the last verse should be written like this;

    Its here,
    lurking over my shoulder.
    Just waiting for me
    to let my guard down,
    before it attacks me,
    and tears me
    and my being apart.

    I just thought it read a lot better that way. Up to you!..

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    Coming from someone who suffers from a condition known as night terrors, this hit home for me..
    To much for me as well, lol
    But excellent portrayel as always
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 17 years ago

    by Wallace

    I enjoyed this, not the usual everyday poem, something different, great work. Thanks for commenting on my poems, the more you do the more I'll return the favour.

    Best Wishes
    Wallace

  • 17 years ago

    by cowgirlstar26

    Sounds like alot of dreams I have, great write. thx for taking time to rrc on my poem. I love the title of this too, very catchy