I think that you should have made it ryhme a little more, but its still good. I like it. You should check out some of my poems, and tell me what you think.

This was really good, it really sounds like you write directly from the heart... not dressing up anything too much, and that's admirable! 5/5 Keep writing and your freed desires will help fulfill your dreams!

Cheers,
Richard

This was really good, it really sounds like you write directly from the heart... not dressing up anything too much, and that's admirable! 5/5 Keep writing and your freed desires will help fulfill your dreams!

Cheers,
Richard