My Sanity On The Funeral Pyre

by Wings Of Flames   Apr 30, 2007


My Sanity On The Funeral Pyre

Thunder crashes breaking,
A faint yet known sound,
Stories told beneath the sheets,
Thus twilight beneath ground,

Lost stars in eternal search,
Amongst all of dark days,
A cry, a plea, somebody?
Yet the mentality has ways,

In this bleak awareness,
A cold yet beaten heart,
A house upon a distant hill,
And a lonely horse and cart,

Clip, clop, clip, clop,
The noise kills the silence,
The clouds dark and heavy,
As I watch them pass,

Tears of dry ache,
Unquenched soils crack,
No cloud tears here,
In thick night's black,

I stroll upon the dead,
Nothing, no one but me,
Look out to the world,
Upon the highest peak,

As I slip away from darkness,
A smell I did quite miss,
Drip, drop, drip, drop,
The rain grants the last kiss.

+ This is about the drought in Australia. One poor depressed farmer who eventually committed suicide from his undrenched pastures. And before he dies he feels the rain. 'The last kiss.' +

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  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow... i think it was really great for you to leave what the poem meant that helped alot ... its sad but beautiful.. the way you made the rainfaill the last kiss was very clever the word choice was great and filled with wonderful descriptions.. the flow was excellent i didnt have trouble with it once in the whole poem.. great job :D

  • 17 years ago

    by Grotesque Angel

    Your poems suck

  • 17 years ago

    by Infected with His Deadly Love

    I loved this poem.
    I live in Australia too and it is very sad about what is happening.
    Anyway the poem was excellent.
    The imagery was great and it flowed well.
    Keep it up 5/5

    [Sarah]

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    The first line was a bit confusing because it really didn't make sense, as hard I tried. I guess a pause after 'crashes' might make it work better, I'm not quite sure. That was the only problem with this poem. I liked the rhymes, they worked well. Very good metaphorical meaning for a 'last kiss'. The story, and the poem worked well together. So good job on this one.

  • 17 years ago

    by Seronum

    Very good poem! I hope everything gets back to normal there. 5/5 keep writing!

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