by Gothic Girl in Pain Apr 30, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
I'm in a lot of pain. In so much pain that I could die. |
Good job!! i really like how the poem was easy to understand but at the same time it wasnt boring. it kept me interested. it was sad though something like that happened to me :( |
Wow that was great, your getting better, definately a poem, it had heart and a voice very nice just a little transition and it would be perfect. I give it a 4.5 so round it up a 5 |