by ASPHYXIATED Apr 30, 2007
category :
Friendship, family /
other
Baby doll don't cry, for safety's on its way, |
It was perfect, love. |
I really like this poem, i'm actually going to have my friend read this one, but i think this last line should be fixed some how...and pls dont take it the wrong way...i just think that you ahould either take out " && i'll always be by your side or there's no need to hide, because it just sounds like too much or something...but 4/5! |
by Vanessa
I commented on this earlier but for some reason, it didn't show up, Anyway I really loved the word choice, and the emtion was strong in this short and sweet poem. perfectly penned, and the flow was amazing. 5/5 for you deserve nothing less |
Great write...You beautifully expressed emotions in this 1...loved it!...excellent work!!.kp it up! |
by TracyM
Wow, i really did like this one, i love the way it was written. you can real feel the emotion here. very good. |