Hey..Beautiful write!.well expressed...i could relate to my own experience!....kp writing!...
tk care!
~pooja~

Hi there,

Lets see hmm the 2nd verse seems a bit longer than the rest so maybe try...
I thought we were perfect
You were everything I wanted
But now you act like this
Not sure about things anymore

I'm no pro, but I often have the same problem when writing my poems, one verse seems to be much longer than the rest, so i take out some words that the reader automatically puts in.

I'm not a big fan of poems that don't rhyme, but this poem sounds like it comes from the heart and I think that matters more than rhyme : )

4/5 from me

Very nice poem. I can relate. Keep up the great work:) 5/5

Hello, again.
Like I said.
It's great.
Only...
You could do better if you get
Synonyms for these words.
I believe them too simple.
Everyone does simple these days.
Make the reader want to get a dictionary
And find the words they don't understand.
Still.
It's very good.
5/5 =]

Short, simple, and really fantastic! I like the shortness of this poem, and I'm glad it isn't any longer than it needs to be. I've been trying to write a poem like this only because I've been feeling that way. Reading this has cleared the confusion. It was very beautiful.

Simplistic yet sweet. I'm sure you care about this person very much. If it was meant to be, it will be meant to be. I like the poem, and I hope you find your answer.

Very nice job...

I feel the same way all the time about this curtain guy. I wish he was here holding me right now...just to be in his arms once more i would die for. Don't give up honey...someday it will all turn out right

Good Luck!
PM me if you ever wanna talk about it
Love
~Shannon~

Short yet fufilling. i admire your ability to keep things simple and interesting at the same time. A skill taken for granted by most. 5/5

It was a little on the short side, I thought for the length of it the emtion could have been a little stronger, but still a good write. As always you did a great job. 4/5

Really good poem. i'm kinda in that situation now. keep writing!!!

This ending was a ton better
than other poems of yours
the flow was ok
but i still like it

5/5

I wasn't very fond of it. It seemed more like just thoughts going through your mind...which poems can be but this one I just wasn't that big on. 2.