Everything is sweeter

by Alesia   May 1, 2007


Waking up knowing that every step,
every breath,every glance,
is going to be better than yesterdays.
Smiling a luminous smile at each passing day,
and enjoying all that is changing.

The sun shines more radiant as it sets and rises.
Colours seem more vibrant,
and everything just seems so serene.
A birds tune is a ravishing melody that plays a sweet song. A hymn that can not leave my mind.

Every stride is a stride taken with joy.
Songs sing non-stop through my head.
This change is so much sweeter.
The air is just so much more breathable.

The summers breeze smells so new, and fresh.
I can't understand why everything is just so much sweeter.
One remarkable day,
and my whole life has changed.

The flowers are more attractive, and fill the air with a delightful fragrance.
The rain, is like a perfume that can not be captivated. Everything passes by in slow motion just so I can see what the world has to offer.
Everything just shines in a better looking light.

My heart beats a different rhythm, and my stomach fills with this sensation.
My mind carries me to different places.
Everything is just sweeter.

I can walk across a rainbow, only to see you at the other end, with arms and a heart wide open.
Looking in your eyes through mine,
has made everything just that much sweeter.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I loved it. That is what my world is like now with my bf. I also liked the word choice. Keep up the great work. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Opps, take the "Smiling a luminous smile at each passing day," in my example of a stanza and make it a new line, so it reads...

    "Waking up knowing that every step,
    every breath, and every glance,
    is going to be better than yesterdays.
    Smiling a luminous smile at each passing day,
    and enjoying all that is changing."

  • 17 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wonderful write once again, however; I felt the structure needs work, you have it in paragraphs rather than stanzas. Break it up into stanzas and the structure will be much better.

    For example take this, "Waking up knowing that every step, every breath,every glance, is going to be better than yesterdays. Smiling a luminous smile at each passing day, and enjoying all that is changing."

    And change it into stanzas like this,

    "Waking up knowing that every step,
    every breath, and every glance,
    is going to be better than yesterdays. Smiling a luminous smile at each passing day,
    and enjoying all that is changing."

    Flows much better because the reader now knows where to stop and begin, the structure is much better as well.

    Other than that small detail, I loved your word choice and punctuation. Great Job!

    Peace, Joe

  • 17 years ago

    by Miu

    Aww so beautiful.. Love makes everything sweeter every single day... Amazing poem! Great flow and touched me :) Keep up the great work!

  • 17 years ago

    by Greg Beam

    I usually dont care for free verse poems cuz most of them are hard to read. but this was a very easy read. great job. very good flow and word usage. keep up the great writing!

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