Amazing poem hun. You use alot of detail and that makes it more deep. 5/5 on this one. Keep it up. Xx Chrissie

Smashing work! I could really feel the pain in this poem. It was just so emotive. At times it lost a little flow, but it picked right back up. I loved the way you worded this poem most of all. Beautifully penned. Amazing job!

It was showed emotions and truth
But i have something to advise if you let me,
It would be better if you shorten the length of lines and length of poem,i mean to make it into parts cos it would make it easier to read
Other than that so perfect..my faves should be those

But revenge is sweet, and revenge you will eat.
As I tare into your flesh and beat you like meat.
I'll hang you from a rope and poke you with a stick.
And stitch your lips together, you'll not speak beyond the brick.

Keep it up hun
Take care
Laura

Wow! A truly captivating poem... Beautifully written with such intense emotion and amazing description/imagination... The flow of words is nicely written.. Great work! Definitely 5/5 from me...