Wow, cool poem. I must say, it's got a really cool imagination...unless its a reality..which would be kinda wierd...and freaky >.<...well I didn't think anything was missing I kindaliked it infact. Maybe you could talk more abt the guy who killed her. Coz its kinda like he's confused..
"She couldn't see in front of her,
so she turned on a light...
and there, right before her two eyes,
a human stood in fright..."
so he's scared...but he's gonna kill her and be happy about it. Maybe you wanna introduce him like a sadistic wierdo..right? But I liked the poem though, and if you don't think anything is missing anymore I'd suggest you leave it the way it is:)