Wow. you have some talent.. This was really well written!! Good Job!! this is a 5/5 without a doubt!!

...Hmm I'd say fix the rhyming because at times it seems a little forced and awkward. I like the imagery but it can be better expressed with...sharper pointed words. I do like the ending image. For some reason I'm thinking of a game scenario with the images, which works perfectly with this write.
~Faith-less

It's very well written though it would have been a bit better wth stronger words for description....but it's better off this way....kudos!.....u've penned the whole poem well....5/5..
Tk care!
xxPoojaxx

Good poem.
The rhyming didn't seem forced and the flow was flawless.
Keep it up 5/5

Wow this poem is amazing.. I loved it. I have nothing to critique on here just praise. It reminded me of those child soldiers in third world countries, forced to kill their enemies. Amazing job, I always feel bad for those kids becauase they dont have any choice in the matter yet its their hands that do the killing so its their minds that are going to be scared for life because of it not the government not their parents, theirs. Well done.