Comments : How Do I Forget?

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I like this. strong emtions, great chose of words. you did an excellent job. I can relate. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Very well done.
    The flow was a bit shaky. You could have used better grammar and more periods, commas, and some places they were not needed. Other than that well done.
    God Bless 5/5
    <3Tay^__^

  • 17 years ago

    by Kristina

    The last stanza the second and last line are really long, longer then the rest, so it kind of throws the poem off. i do it a lot of my writing to and i know it's hard to think of something else and you like it the way it's written, but maybe you could try shortening it like:

    How do I get better?
    When I only wish for you on a star
    How do I forget you?
    The only one who could break my heart

    maybe something like that? i'm not trying to be mean just trying to help you out.
    but other then that i really liked the poem and it had a lot of emotion in it. keep on writing.
    5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 17 years ago

    by omgitsmina

    I love the last stanza, a very powerful end to a sad poem. Great poem. My only comment suggesting otherwize would be that some of the lines didn't flow as well. Very good as a whole. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Again, my favourite part is the last stanza, it was heartbreaking and gripping, strong and intense.
    You certainly have a way with ending your poems.
    My only suggestion on this is to try and make some of the longer lines a little shorter, as it could help improve the overall flow in the poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Viola

    Hey..this reminds me of the song Cold As You by Tailor Swift. it's a good poem =] keep it up!