by Vanessa
I like this. strong emtions, great chose of words. you did an excellent job. I can relate. 5/5 |
Very well done. |
by Kristina
The last stanza the second and last line are really long, longer then the rest, so it kind of throws the poem off. i do it a lot of my writing to and i know it's hard to think of something else and you like it the way it's written, but maybe you could try shortening it like: |
by omgitsmina
I love the last stanza, a very powerful end to a sad poem. Great poem. My only comment suggesting otherwize would be that some of the lines didn't flow as well. Very good as a whole. 5/5 |
by Jenni Marie
Again, my favourite part is the last stanza, it was heartbreaking and gripping, strong and intense. |
by Viola
Hey..this reminds me of the song Cold As You by Tailor Swift. it's a good poem =] keep it up! |