Dragonflies and Astronauts - Schizophrenia {Triple Triolet}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   May 1, 2007


Let us sing an anthem that will arise
The unwanted thoughts of burgundy dreams.
Find a distant place where the heart lies;
Let us sing an anthem that will arise.
Masquerade to the mind that tries;
Gentle breeze to blow the mind, it seems.
Let us sing an anthem that will arise
The unwanted thoughts of burgundy dreams.

Search disillusional thoughts that aren't there,
You'll grope for hope in this mess of distress.
To comfort yourself, God will send you something rare;
Search disillusional thoughts that aren't there.
He will take your hand and make you aware
Of your last full thought that crazes to confess.
Search disillusional thoughts that aren't there,
You'll grope for hope in this mess of distress.

Catch that mind from losing so much control,
Punish it for leaving you all alone.
Push yourself for all you have is your soul,
Catch that mind from losing so much control.
Dragonflies will sing, astronauts will see,
How far away own thoughts are from home.
Catch that mind from losing so much control,
Punish it for leaving you all alone.

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A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines
repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital
letters representing the repeated lines.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow this poem was very well done. I think that the last stanza was definatly my favorite because when I started reading it I wasn't to sure how the title was going to make sence but now that I'm done I can see now. You used so many metaphores in your poetry and while they are all very unique they all have meaning and make sence with the poem that they are placed in. "Catch that mind from losing so much control," I think that this was such a beautifuly penned line and I loved the meaning. Well done. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    Man, the triolet scheme seems so punctual, but it flowed well. same a cherise i must say i loved the line about dragonflies and astronaughts. a great write. and always looking for more. (:

  • 17 years ago

    by Cherise

    "Dragonflies will sing, astronauts will see,
    How far away own thoughts are from home.
    Catch that mind from losing so much control,
    Punish it for leaving you all alone."

    I adored those lines, I love reading poems like this, they really get you thinking. I loved how you managed to make it flow so well, and great word choice too :) 5/5 great work.

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I love your poetry. It always inspires me to write more, but I can't write because I'm supposed to be doing my Chemistry and I took a break, haha. But, I loved this. I was going to take this title for that contest, but I didn't, obviously. And you did a way better job with it than I ever could have lol. Keep it up Darling.

    "How far away own thoughts are from home."

    ^^ In that line, would it make more sense to make it.. "How far away OUR own thoughts are from home."

    Without the capitals, of course. Lol. Anyways, great write.

    5.5

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