Beautiful Garden

by Brittany C   May 2, 2007


I'm walking in a lush garden.
On a winding stone path.
Surrounded in a peaceful heaven.
The beauty is almost overwhelming.

God this is a beautiful place.
Where as I walk along fat
bumblebees are buzzing near my ears
while they collect their pollen from little flowers.

There are thousands of flowers.
Growing tall from the rich soil.
Their petals full of color and
sparkling with sweet drops of dew.

It the garden of melodies.
A place of peaceful quit,
that only natures design
can make for no other can.

A place full of magical music,
and the melodies float lightly
on the sweet air all around you.
You can hear it you are quiet.

It is a perfect place for you to rest.
At the end of a long exhausting day.
You can come here to rest your
tired mind. There is a swing waiting for you.

So I walk on down the path
and take in all of the beauty.
Till I come to a wood swing,
hanging from an old weeping willow.

The weeping willow is a lonely tree.
There are just other trees in the garden.
Why that is I really do not know,
but it won't be that way much longer.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Independence Forever

    Some of my best thoughts and ideas have come from gardens which were just like you explained them. thank you for giving back the thrill of a peaceful retreat.

    your servant:
    david

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    There are thousands of flowers.
    Growing tall from the rich soil.
    Their petals full of color and
    sparkling with sweet drops of dew.
    [[Beautifully penned.]]

    You can hear it you are quiet.
    [[You can hear {when} you are quiet. OR
    You can hear it{;} you are quiet.]]

    Now, I liked this. The discription was very strong, however I did not like the ending paragraph. Hm. Stop using "lush" in every poem. =] I used to do that with "ecstasy"; their are other words. =] Lmao.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by xoLifeandLoveox

    Lovely poem! I can picture how beautiful this place must be. Great word useage to evoke this image! <3

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    Quit< should be quiet.
    Other than that you did a really good job with this poem. I liked it, especially the last stanza. Keep it up. :D

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    This was a really good poem, it had very nice imagery. The mood was very somber, and that made the poem so fun to read! I thought it was weird though, how you moved from 4 line verses to five, didn't seem like there was a pattern or anything, but it's still good. Awesome job on this one.

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