Your Beauitiful Song

This was so beautifully written.
The imagery used created vivid pictures, and after reading I was left with a peaceful glowy feeling.
You did a wonderful job with this.

What a lovely little nature write.
It's nice to read something so simple yet so beautiful at the same time.

The first word of the very first line I think should be "it's."

I loved how you used many happy words like "smile" "sun shine" "peek" "free" these words subconciously make the reader happy when reading them, so this was a powerful way to get the reader involved.

On the seventh line, you use the word "job" may I suggest you try and think of a substitute for this word? Just because to me a "job" is something we HAVE to do but sometimes don't want to; a job is labour.
Of course you don't really want to portray being a beautiful bird singing as a hard task.

Also, on the eighth line, it should be "bird's."

Loved the last line, such a lovely way to end. I was wondering though if it should be semi colons rather than commas that you use there?

Thanks for sharing this gorgeous write.

Overall the poem was ok, yes just ok. It wasn't bad, just needs a little work. I felt it was a little short and it could've been longer.

In the first line of the poem, the word, "Its" should be changed to, "It's" for it means "it is"

Alright, I must say the flow of this poem needs lots of work, it's kind of bumpy. Also the way you have it now, it looks like a paragraph, perhaps change it into stanzas so that the structure of the poem is better as well.

Sorry for my harshness, but I am very honest with comments, for I feel it helps a person become better as a writer. Keep up the hard work.

Peace, Joe

Well, that's actually something quite good and interesting. It's almost nature-ish but can also fit into life. Short, to the point and nicely done.
Oh yeah this line:
"I awoke today, to hear a birds words spoken so soft"
Shouldn't 'birds' be bird's? Nice imagery.
~Faith-less

Well well well, this is just magnificent! Something totally different from you! Lol, I really enjoyed this poem, it was very relaxing and very happy. The images were beautiful. Good job on this one!