This is a very mesmerizing dark poem with an effective format. I get a sense of precognition in the reoccurring line "Somebody spoke and I went into a dream"

Good poem, great message... what do you see? great poem and a connection that is unlikely to occur... congrats!!

I like this piece very, very much. The opening and closing stanzas were strong and the rhymes was well written, as was every line. I liked the way that the first two lines of the opening and closing stanza were the same. There were a few other parts that I enjoy reading more than others like;

'A never ending nightmare without a final scene'

'All I can hear is a silent scream'

'I am finally at rest, and I'm never coming back'

My favorite, of course was the final line, which was perhaps the greatest line of the entire piece, which is what makes it so important that it goes last. Anyway, great piece.

Brad

I liked reading it but sometimes the flow felt off. The repetition was actually effective and the concept was something different. I do like how the first and final stanzas kinda tie in together with the first two lines of each.
~Faith-less

This was very well written. The emotion in it was great and strong and the word choice/rhyming were perfect. I love how you incorporated the repetition into the poem.

5/5 :-)

Everyone asking are you alright? this from your poems needs a , in it and maybe some talking marks.

but this was really well done. this poem spoke to me, and i thought i read a different story that was hidden between the lines.

5/5 David