This is hauntingly beautiful. It could be about so many things, which makes it possible to touch so many people.

The line breaks make you read it slowly, which emphasizes your sadness or hopelessness.

Looking at it grammatically, I may not be reading the meaning you intended, but it seems like "lingered" should be "lingering".

Great work.

Debbie
How sad this write is. The imagery is fantastic. Word choices great.

Dreams abandoned
To empty arms

These lines really touch the heart
Love your sis Cindy

Sadness is when dreams come to nothing
but we can still dream ....some dreams can come true........

"Dreams abandoned
To empty arms "

What an ending.. it was so poignant and leaves plenty of room for interpretation!
Excellent as always m'dear
Never expect anything less from you
5/5
*Gem*

Short and very thoughtful poem. Just magnificent!

This was short and to the point..i liked it..it confused me the first time i read it which makes you wanna read it again and again till you get it...then when you get it you wanna read it again to feel more of the emotion from it
very very good job!
5/5
if you get teh chance check out a couple fo my poems

thanks much!

luv,
~Shannon~

Nice peace of work, very sad writting.. But beautfulll.

"In a lover's gaze
Broken stars fell
Softly dying
As wishes slumbered
In the dormant light"

arhh, nice writting.
Good job
5/5

Wow that was really beautiful, I loved the imagery you used like the idea of the moon being scarred. The length was perfect as well as it maintained the atmosphere.

A vert heartfelt poem sad but beautifully written. captures the pain in each line.

Chavii.

This is one amazing piece. So beautifully penned and hidden in meaning that it can touch any reader. Wonderful work

I really like this ... yay....5/5... check mine out...

So very beautiful..........hauntingly
surrenders to sadness....
Very beautiful, very deep..........

Sad, but a really beautiful poem. I especially liked the part about broken stars. This was very deep.

That was a good poem keep it up

So short yet so powerful!
great job one of my favs. the sadness and anger is so amazing...ugh brings me back to hard times...LOVED IT!
5/5

Very good I loved this poem. You show your feelings very well. Written amazingly 5/5
Check out mine please

Really nice...good flow and work choice...i really really like what you've done. You're a talented poet

Its sad but pretty. Feeling is everything.

Your poetry runs deep debbie, i mean it, short but this is so great, love it, another 5/5!!! keep them comming!!!

Lines are short, description yet to a minumum. different and exciting. well done.

5/5 David