Hmm. It was short, but really good.
I think you should have made two five line stnazas though, I don't like the two, two, two..s o on. Eh. But, it was a great poem.

keep it up.
<3teria.

It was short but very good. I greatly enjoyed reading it. 5/5

Kalee

Good poem.
I feel you could of done more on this poem.
But other than that its good.
It flowed well and the emotion was shown.
Keep it up 5/5

[Sarah]

The poem ends and leaves the reader hanging.. perhaps you could lengthen it? Also the rhyming is simple, but perhaps you could even out the syllables in each line to help the flow of the writing? Just a few suggestions, anyway it was a good emotional and heartfelt write. 4/5.
-AOTD/Kurt

It was a good write ,can use a few improvements
short and simple I like that,all and all good job,,5/5,,, your friend Tracy

"but all 'your' doing is smirking."
[you're] Because you are trying to say 'you are'.

The rhyming couplets were good, but the flow was VERY shakey, especially in the last line, and you shouldn't end a poem with a line that isn't strong. I'm saying this out of all honesty, sorry if it sounds mean.

Thought the poem was good, i think that it just feels kinda half finished. i think whats been said everyone can relate to it in a way i just think it may have needed a few more lines. However this poem could mean something completely different to you and therefore the few lines could have more meaning than if you added more. but overall i though it was good

I think you could have added more lines to each part, but it's still good

I love the topic of this poem and you have some good ideas in it and really portrayed the emotion, but the one thing that I think that you could improve on is the length. I think that it would have been better if you have maybe added just one or two more stanzas, but that's just my opinion. Overall, it was a great poem! 5/5

Aww its really short :) but you really spend your time on this poem! Every line has rhymes.

but all >your< doing is smirking.
Its you're :)

TC

I felt that this poem ended much to abruptly, and that your title wasn't a great one for this poem. I like the use of real-life details, but your vocabulary could have been so much stronger and unique. Instead, it seemed like you forced lines into the poem just to make it longer and so it would rhyme. It was a good topic to choose, just executed badly.

It was one the short side, but stil it had enough emtion to carry it off. YOu did an excellent job on this one. as always. the flow was perfect, and the word choice was amazing. 5/5

Hm. this was very short and in this short time you seemed to discuss a few topics, I think that if you were to stick to one topic it would make it much better. However I loved the flow to this poem. It was short and sweet, and some of the words were preaty good. I think that you should add a bit more to this poem. Add more descriptions and more feelings, but you have a nice beginning there.

I like the set-up of this poem. it's really different and nice.