Comments : Lover or friend (I need you there)

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittney

    This is easy to relate to.
    I love the way it's written.
    5/5 wonderful

  • 17 years ago

    by Luis Sousa

    Astonish
    ,
    allways
    improving
    ...

  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Won't ever care = I won't ever care

    I enjoyed this poem, and it was very cute... However, I did not particularly find your lack and often misuse of punctuation that appeasing. In some places, I found that I had no direction for the flow, and other places I found you would have an inaccurate punctuation mark placed that i just wanted to strangle (although, it's pretty difficult to strangle a comma... lol)

    I liked your word use, and despite the evil comma and other punctuation that was misused, the flow was smooth too. I liked your rhyming pattern, and it very much so reminds me of a poem that I would write.

    Well done,
    5/5
    ~Stephen White