So very heartbreaking... I really love the opening of this piece, great job!

You had a consistent rhythm here which really helped with the reading.
You've hit home with this piece, it really got to me for some reason.
Excellent ending
5/5
*gem*

Beautifully written, i can relate. ur a wonderful poet. keep writing. 5/5

Ah i loved the last stanza the most. it truly capped a wonderful poem off. the rest was leading up to the great ending. left me wanting more.

5/5 David

Very good poem, I really enjoyed it, keep it up. Chek out some of my poems, when you have the time.

Best Wishes
Wallace

This is a very nice poem you are a very talented writter

Wow.
Amazing job! :] I'd have to say that the last stanza is my favorite though... ;] The flow was flawless, your word usage was great, & the emotions were strong. Fantastic write, keep it up! 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

A true piece of art. You sculpt letter and words together to form such sorrowful beauty. I hope to see many more beautiful works of art from you. 5/5.

Waw..that was powerful, sad and beautiful...
the word is as though they are alive, its really strong...
great job...
enjoyed it very much

I loved it. Written amazingly. You show your feelings well threw penning. 5/5
Check mine out please