Outside looking in

by Vanessa   May 4, 2007


Only dark and twisted things are in my head
Understanding isn't easy as I have said
Trust is hard to place
Should I disappear without a trace
I don't know
Dead, and dark is my soul
Ending my life is on my mind

Looking back in time
Only complicates things
Openness only brings
Kiddie games
I've gone insane
No where to run, no where to hide
Grieving is meant to be kept inside

I Am ready to fly to glory
No more worries

    report violation
0


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Another awesome peom. Well writen poem with great flow and wonderful word choice. Another 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by David

    Only dark and twisted things are in my head
    Understanding isn't easy as I have said
    Trust is hard to place
    Should I disappear without a trace

    this section from your poem really was so simple yet so full of emotion. well done. from the start i loved this poem. right till the very end.

    5/5 David

  • 17 years ago

    by awww

    This was alright... not the best but i think you could really improve it... because the thought is there, just let it flow out... i was really interested at the start... then it became a bit rocky... but even so, it was still a good poem... keep it up, i feel you can do much betterü

    ~angel~

  • 17 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    Alot of people can relate to this, its delves on thoughts that cross peoples minds all the time.
    criticly i think the ryhmes are a little forced. but didnt take away from the poem (:

    good write.

  • 17 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    I use to think like this, I decided to fight, nice poem 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

Read All Comments (6)

More Poems By Vanessa