Comments : Outside looking in

  • 17 years ago

    by Nessa

    Good Poem, Very nice. 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    I use to think like this, I decided to fight, nice poem 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

  • 17 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    Alot of people can relate to this, its delves on thoughts that cross peoples minds all the time.
    criticly i think the ryhmes are a little forced. but didnt take away from the poem (:

    good write.

  • 17 years ago

    by awww

    This was alright... not the best but i think you could really improve it... because the thought is there, just let it flow out... i was really interested at the start... then it became a bit rocky... but even so, it was still a good poem... keep it up, i feel you can do much betterü

    ~angel~

  • 17 years ago

    by David

    Only dark and twisted things are in my head
    Understanding isn't easy as I have said
    Trust is hard to place
    Should I disappear without a trace

    this section from your poem really was so simple yet so full of emotion. well done. from the start i loved this poem. right till the very end.

    5/5 David

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Another awesome peom. Well writen poem with great flow and wonderful word choice. Another 5/5