Buttoned Dreams {Terzanlle}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   May 4, 2007


Due to syllable count, here's a better understanding of the first line: "Deep on the out" means you're beautiful on the outside "and shallow in" means but you're shallow on the inside.
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Deep on the out and shallow in,
With a shameful heart of "gold,"
Deep on the out and shallow in.

Don't smile; you're not that bold,
Then shove handfuls down your throat,
With a shameful heart of "gold."

Give up; you can't ride this boat,
You'll laugh hard and I'll scream,
Then shove handfuls down your throat.

Take your last and willess dreams,
And shove them all far away;
You'll laugh and I'll scream.

This is end of your happy days,
You'll shutter when you realize;
And shove them all far away.

Your dreams are what you will despise,
Deep on the out and shallow in,
You'll shutter when you realize,
Deep on the out and shallow in.

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1. A
2. B
3. A

4. b
5. C
6. B

7. c
8. D
9. C

10. d
11. E
12. D

13. e
14. F
15. E

16. f
17. A
18. F
19. A

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  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Wow, that was brilliant. The wording was excellent.

    "Don't smile; you're not that bold,
    Then shove handfuls down your throat,
    With a shameful heart of "gold.""

    ^ This stanza was my favourite, especially the last line. I find Terzanelles hard to write, and I'm amazed at how well this is done.

    5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by skynerraw

    I have never seen this type of poem before....hmmm I liked it though, I didn't get the part about "shoving handfuls down your throat" maybe I'm just stupid though, it was a good poem though!!

  • 17 years ago

    by surrender to a broken heart

    Never heard of one of these before but reading yours kept me gripped. x x

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Good poem, I was pulled right in and just had to read it several times...

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    XD I love Terzanelle's and I definately loved this poem. The wording you chose was great, especially the first line, it pulled me into it right away; I was kept in the whole time, too.

    5.5