Comments : Epidemic on the Street {Kryielle Sonnet}

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Whooo! Number 200! xD You are now a golden poet, and very deserving of such. =) I loved this poem, it held a lot of emotion, and I read it a few times and fell more in love with it everytime I did read over it.

    "Clothe yourself with the plague,
    Muscle your way through the fleet,
    To the pavement you will beg;
    Epidemic on the street"

    Those lines, wow! I don't even know what to say, but they were truly amazing, Dear. I mean it.

    5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    "Bet on this and you're sure to lose,
    For the worms you will soon greet,"
    ^ I didn't like the second line of the two above. It seemed unneeded, and sorta misplaced.
    Other than that this was yet another amazing poem. I loved the beginning, it really struck my attention, and kept it the whole way through.
    Keep up the great work!!

  • 17 years ago

    by skynerraw

    I didn't understand the "For the worms you will soon greet", but it was still a great poem! It kept my attention, and was amazing~!
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    200 wow! I like the sonnet you wrote, it left a vivid descripiton in my mind of a disease riddle town. the flow was flawlwss, and nicely peened. I think you did an excellent job, so 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow I loved this poem. And I agree I'm not sure if this is what you meant but the message that I got from this was homelessness was like a sickness that needs to find a cure and I definatly agree with you. It's a disease that although not contagious is something that needs to be looked at with great sevarity(sp?) Amazing job for writing it like that. You have some very unique ways of showing your ideas. Well done. :)